250 response Module III

Between my rough draft and my final draft I made several changes, take for example the inclusion of a new paragraph entailing my own personal experiences with the subject of wisdom. I felt this was important because in a summary you should not only paraphrase the item which you read but also include your own feedback to better explain the article. Also by relating the subject to my own life shows that I have an understanding of what I read. At several points in the essay I added more examples such as the references to Joseph Stalin and Hitler when referring to intelligent individuals holding bad purpose. I also added a short piece about Anne Frank explaining how wisdom may have developed so quickly in the thirteen year old girl. I did this because examples help with clarity, you can directly define something, but relating it to a real life example really brings the definition together. In the rough draft I failed to draw connections between the 3 articles, so I tried to do so by adding sentences which connected the articles. I also changed the conclusion to sum up what all the articles mean in one paragraph allowing the connections to become more evident. When writing the rough draft I couldn’t seem the piece together a conclusion, though I feel the one I created for the final draft completes the task appropriately. Also looking back at the article after several days of my final draft I feel I could’ve made more changes, perhaps a second draft before the final would have been more appropriate for me. It’s a good representation of how nothing is ever perfect, there are always changes that can be made.